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You live in a beautiful but isolated area. This morning you saw this from your kitchen window...
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this post was submitted on 05 Sep 2024
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But you lose the dramatic effect
The dramatic effect is witnessing the trespassing creep transform instantly into pink mist and various chunks of unidentified meat.
And then you find out it was the two neighbor kids in a coat.
implies no neighbor kids to murder
I don't really see isolated to mean completely isolated, more along the lines of "it's a couple miles into town and ten acres between me and the neighbors" but fair enough.
Your personal feeling of a definition of a word does not align with the reality of the actual definition of the word "isolated", so you can think what you want, just realize that it's wrong.
Ideally the dramatic effect from the pumping action renders the need to use it unnecessary.