Strong start. Theres conflict, an intriguing setting. I wonder if we could get a stronger feeling of who the MC is, a little bit of background. Right now she's just a viewpoint. What does she want, why is being fired such a big deal? Is she just worried about money and what Aeko will think, or is there some other reason? Thanks for sharing this!
Excerpt from Shivers, a magipunk novelette/novella I'm working on. Let me know what you think of it.
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What part of the last fifteen or so years of human history leads you to the fairly surprising assertion that you should assume good faith?