Embellishment (A Poem for Thee) (beehaw.org)

submitted 3 years ago by Humanoid@beehaw.org to c/writing@beehaw.org

5 comments fedilink hide all child comments

Thou art coral-red & blue; constellation
of desires, dance of spring-youth
& time-worn winter alike—
Thou art right
as a bright moon upon a starry night!

Come, fine friend, combine
thine amethyst love with mine,
so I might mine garnets
from thy mind
& find thy diamonds thus thrice divine!

Whilst I, sapphire as I may be,
sleep sublime submerged in sea,
& seek out olive peridot,
yellow & green—
Scenes of opaline moonstone dreams!

top 5 comments

sorted by: hot top new old

[-] JuniperusVox@beehaw.org 3 points 3 years ago

I adore this. It feels like a dwarven love poem.

[-] Humanoid@beehaw.org 2 points 3 years ago

Hahaha, that thought hadn't occurred to me but you're totally right! That gives me a delightful new way to read it, thank you!

[-] kalanggam@beehaw.org 1 points 3 years ago

What a beautiful poem. Love the rhythm of it, and this alliteration

sleep sublime submerged in sea

adds such a nice luster to the whole piece!

[-] Humanoid@beehaw.org 2 points 3 years ago

Thank you! I've been out of practice for several years, but this one jumped out of me a couple months ago. I had a lot of fun playing with the colors and sound in this poem!

[-] koala@latte.isnot.coffee 1 points 3 years ago

Wonderful work, it flows off the tongue beautifully.

this post was submitted on 07 Jun 2023

8 points (100.0% liked)

Writing

2336 readers

3 users here now

A specific community for original shortform and longform writing, stories, worldbuilding, and other stuff of that nature.

Subcommunity of Creative

This community's icon was made by Aaron Schneider, under the CC-BY-NC-SA 4.0 license.

founded 3 years ago

MODERATORS

alyaza@beehaw.org

mint@beehaw.org

remington@beehaw.org